I really have been working. Check out this page -- the first page of my first chapter. If you knew how many times I've edited this thing - ARGH - it should not have this many changes!!
And, geez, it looks even worse when I track changes!
Still, I think the beginning is stronger and more active with less backstory and "telling". I hope that the reader can figure out who is who, since Camilla and the reader get bombarded with her entire crazy family right from the get-go.
Okay, back to editing. I hope the whole book isn't this bad.
Here They Are Again
4 hours ago