We had a pretty decent weekend... fairly quiet, which is always a good thing. DD had her art show last week. I wasn't impressed with the projects this time, but the class is for a wide range of ages and this time it included some very young kidlets, so the projects were not as complicated.
I did like the idea behind this handprint:
But her mosaic wasn't as difficult as last time:
And then there was this odd modernistic collage:
And a study of complimentary colors:
Still, she had fun so I suppose that's what matters -- not turning her into the next Monet.
I read an excerpt of a book last week that nearly made me cry. The premise sounded interesting, but the writing was so poorly done and edited that, considering the excerpt was supposed to intrigue me and cause me to buy the book, it failed and also made me want to slap the editor first, then the author.
It went something like this, in part:
Martha ran down the trail. Martha loved to run in the mornings. It was pretty, and clear and the air was fresh. Mornings were her favorite part of the day. She was so involved in her enjoyment she didn't see the knife flash down. She didn't see it cut her throat, or the enjoyment on the face of the man who attacked her.
Sadly, I'm not exaggerating.
Those of you who are readers only were probably a bit bored. Those of you who are also writers should see several errors in this finished product.
First, it's all "telling". Apparently this author missed the lesson on "show don't tell".
Second, it slips from third person POV (Martha's) into some odd omniscient narrative, which is a no-no. Head-hopping isn't great IMHO, but in this one we don't have a second head we hop into ... we just get told what's happening by the author. If Martha "didn't see" what was going on, she couldn't relay it to us.
I nearly screamed in frustration. First, this author should have done her homework. But in the absence of that, her editor should have either NOT contracted this work or TAUGHT her the correct way to write this. Shame on both of them.
Something like this is how it should have looked for publication (I'm writing this off the cuff, so it's not perfect):
Martha's feet thumped the dirt as she ran. She filled her lungs with the crisp, cool morning air and smiled as she made her way down the winding path. Was there anything better than a morning jog through the woods? She didn't think so.
A snap of a twig was the only warning she got before the knife swung down and sliced the tender skin below her chin. The pain burned and she stumbled on the path, grabbing her throat with one hand in an attempt to stop the blood pouring from the wound. The last thing she saw as she fell was the look of glee on her attackers face.
It's a shame. Truth is, a good editor is the best thing any writer can have.
You Are a Kiwi
You're a very outgoing person. You start each day excited about the people you'll see and meet.
You're the type of person who's just comfortable around others. You are a very social creature.
You are quite opinionated. You can't help but have a view on everything, and you don't mind sharing it!
You are prepared for whatever comes your way in life. You plan for the worst and expect the best.
The first part, not so much, but the second half is right on.